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can't live without you~ oh oh oh~ ♥ [Mar. 24th, 2010|08:19 pm]
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Title: Reverie
Author: argh/hentai_m
Rating: PG-13/R? :S
Length: 4,807 words
Pairing: Onew/Minho (TofuHo♥)
Summary: Um... this is a weird fantasy-like fic. :/ Idk. Something happens to Jinki and finds himself in a strange place?
Warnings: weird... almost AU but not quite... almost fantasy but not quite :/
Dedicated to: eijifujiryoma ♥♥♥! ^^ (fhsdkjfjsdk I TOLD YOU THIS WAS WEIRD D: DON'T SAY I DIDN'T WARN YOU LOL?) and dedicated to pixziestikxz ♥ thanks for the beta :D




Reverie

TofuHo

***

There was a thud, and then Jinki felt the world grow dark and cold. Slowly, he felt his vision blur before it faded out completely, shifting from colourful to a dull grey. The dull grey faded into a solid, pitch black, and Jinki felt so alone and completely deaf. Everything was gone, and for some time he was only aware of this blackness and he felt as if he floated in a place devoid of everything. It felt as if he was suspended in the void for years, but he felt warmth on his skin, and a slight breeze which stirred his senses and made Jinki curious to know if he could see something other than the black.

Jinki opened his eyes to a warm golden brightness, and he sighed as he looked up at the soft pink sky. It was dotted with little white clouds that made him think of marshmallows. He sucked in a deep breath as he gazed up at the pastel pink sky; it was such a soft shade of pink that it looked like the sky was made out of cotton candy. He pursed his lips together, looking up at the cotton candy sky, feeling incredibly happy.

It felt like a dream, so Jinki eagerly stepped into the meadow, feeling the tall grass sway around his legs. If he listened closely, he could hear a faint melody; it seemed to follow the swaying of the yellow grass. It seemed to float all around him, and he was sure he could almost see the music notes floating in the cotton candy sky.

As far as he could see, the golden yellow grass spread, and he watched as it rippled and swayed, moving like the ocean. He sighed again, smiling widely as he gazed up at the pink sky, and the pale purple sun, although it seemed more like a moon. Because he could easily look at the purple sun, it didn’t hurt his eyes, but it shimmered and gleamed, reminding him of the moon, except that it was clearly day.

Jinki laughed as he waded through the grass. He felt so light, almost as if he could fly or float if he wanted to. He felt full of energy, and didn’t think he had ever been happier; this was the best dream ever. He sighed as he walked through the golden grass, listening to the faint tune of the music, and he followed the music, followed the rippling grass, letting it guide his feet forever forward.

He had no idea of the passage of time. The sky remained the soft pretty pink hue, and the grass swayed all around him. But after some time of walking, Jinki found that he was approaching a large mountain; it was strange because moments earlier, he had seen nothing. But in one blink of his eyes, a mountain had appeared before him, and something inside Jinki swelled and he felt so excited to see the mountain.

He found that he was moving faster and faster, and he was almost gasping as he reached the foot of the mountain. His eyes widened as he stared up at it; it was impressive, and it looked so surreal. It thrust up from the swaying golden grass, and Jinki could see it was covered with a lighter, soft green grass. The grass looked so soft, and slightly wet, that it seemed to shimmer and sparkle in the soft light.

The longer Jinki stared at the mountain, the more it seemed as if the green grass glowed and pulsed with a faint light. Jinki laughed softly, and he quickly ran closer, shivering as he stepped onto the glowing grass. As soon as he stepped onto it, he heard a tinkling sound, like a clear stream of water, or a bell tinkling, and he frowned and looked up, gasping as he saw an arch a metre in front of him. The arch looked golden, and it had two thin gold beams stretching up to meet in the middle, and wrapped around each beam, Jinki could see green glittering vines, with pale purple and blue flowers hanging off of them.

Jinki blinked, looking around. That arch had not been there moments before, but it was there now and it beckoned to him, it called to him. He could hear laughter and soft music coming from the arch, and he could smell the sweet blossoms. Feeling enchanted, he stepped forward, stepped into the arch, shivering as he felt a bright light wash over him, and then he was in a meadow, filled with bright green grass and flowers everywhere.

He found it hard to breathe as he glanced down at the flowers covering the grass; it was like he was suspended in a blanket of flowers. The colours of the flowers were so bright that they shimmered and shone, and the light made them sparkle like a rainbow. It was so beautiful, he felt his heart speed up. And he was sure he could hear the flowers singing faintly.

Welcome, Onyu

Jinki froze, hearing a voice in his head. He turned to see a freakishly tall person smiling down warmly at him. Jinki swallowed as he looked up; his skin was lightly tanned, and he was so tall, with a bright happy smile, and his eyes were like pools of liquid chocolate. Jinki felt like he could drown in their depths, and he shivered hearing the boy laugh; it was that same tinkling sound he had heard earlier.

“Onyu?” Jinki whispered, biting his lip as he stared at the tall gorgeous looking boy.

The boy laughed again and nodded his head, “Yes, Onyu. I’m so glad to see you here. I’ve been waiting for you.” He was clothed in what looked like leaves to Jinki, making him blush because there were only a few green leaves covering his lean body. The way he stood was so elegant and graceful, and he looked so lithe and muscular. He held a hand out to Jinki, “Come with me?” He asked with a soft smile, and Jinki found that he wanted nothing more than to go with him.

Nothing made sense, but at the same time, Jinki felt perfectly at ease. He glanced around at his surroundings again, noting that he could no longer see the arches. The flowers seemed to be sparkling, like diamonds and jewels in the grass. He sucked in a deep breath as he gazed down at the shining hues of purple, blue, pink, green and white flowers that covered the entire ground. It was so beautiful, and it seemed to him that there were more flowers than before; they sparkled so brightly his eyes watered. He found that as he stared down, he could hear the music more strongly.

He looked up and took the boys hand, wanting to ask what his name was, if he had a name. The boy laughed again, and Jinki shivered as he heard Minho. You can call me Minho in his head. He blinked and nodded his head. Jinki felt happy as he took the boys hand. His skin was smooth and soft and warming to his fingers.

“Where are we, Minho?” Jinki asked shyly, as he felt the boy lead him away, and they walked through the sea of coloured flowers. Jinki’s eyes were wide as he took in everything, gazing up at the sky, and feeling his heart pulse faster as Minho’s hand gripped his tighter. We are here. We are wherever we are. I don’t know where we are, Onyu. I just found myself here, waiting for you.

“Can… can… you read my thoughts?” Jinki asked as they walked, and the scenery changed, but it stayed the same. Jinki only knew it had changed because the flowers changed colours as they walked, and they sparkled differently too but he didn’t feel tired. Instead, he felt like he had unlimited energy and he never wanted to stop walking. Yes, and you read my thoughts too, Onyu.

“Oh” Jinki mumbled softly, his eyes blinking as he smiled warmly up at Minho. His heart was pounding in his chest, and the glinting flowers made his head spin with a strange emotion. He could’ve sworn that the leaves covering Minho were glittery too, but he wasn’t sure if that was just the flowers or his eyes playing tricks on him.

Jinki had no idea of how much time passed, but they kept walking through the softly swaying grasses and flowers. Jinki found that no matter how far they walked, he never felt tired even if at times it seemed as they had walked for days. Minho gripped his hand tightly, and at times he stepped close to Jinki, and his scent flooded Jinki’s senses. Somehow, Minho’s scent made Jinki feel warm and feel like he was alive; it made him feel this strange desire.

They didn’t talk much either, just walked and somehow it felt so comfortable to Jinki. He shivered slightly, feeling a strange sensation across his skin when he felt Minho curl his arm around Jinki’s waist. His hand fitted perfectly against the small of Jinki’s back. Minho’s arm felt warm against his skin, and in surprise, Jinki looked down, his eyes going wide as he saw that he was dressed in leaves the same as Minho. Jinki blinked his eyes, feeling his cheeks heat up. He was sure he had been dressed in something different moments earlier.

Minho smirked, looking down at Jinki’s bright red face. He stepped closer to him, his hands curving down to rest just above Jinki’s ass. Ah, uncomfortable? Want to wear something else? Minho asked with a large grin, and Jinki shyly nodded his head. When he looked down again, his eyes went wide because now he was wearing what looked like a large sack. Jinki frowned; a shapeless dull grey sack was not quite what he had in mind.

“Minho!” He whined up at the other boy, who was laughing out loud at his reaction and the face he pulled when he saw the sack. Jinki pouted, but the more Minho laughed, he found that he didn’t mind so much what he was wearing. Minho’s laugh felt like medicine, or a cool summer rain that was refreshing, sweet and also somehow soothing.

Unconsciously, Jinki found himself moving closer to Minho, and almost shyly, he slipped his arm around the boy’s waist. His fingers shifted nervously on the taller boys back, and he felt unsure, but at the same time it felt so natural to walk like that. His hand felt like it fitted in the small of Minho’s back too, and so happily he rested it there.

Jinki noticed that nothing really changed around them. The grass remained the same length and the sky never grew darker or lighter. It was strange, but it also felt comforting to him. Jinki sighed happily, as Minho’s hand shifted across his back and he found himself leaning into the touch. He shut his eyes for a moment and he opened them when he felt Minho stop.

His jaw dropped immediately, and he stared in disbelief at the lake that was now directly in front of them. It was not there seconds or even minutes earlier, but it was now. Jinki swallowed, feeling this strong desire inside him to dive into the calm waters, to slip into its deep depths, and to enjoy swimming in its waters. It looked so beautiful, and inviting; he felt like it was beckoning to him.

Jinki looked up when he saw Minho step away, and in one movement, he had discarded his leaf clothes and he was running naked into the water. Jinki blushed and he found that his desire to go swimming was increasing by the second. So he too stripped down, and feeling embarrassed, he quickly got into the water. He felt a strong urge to be in the water, to feel it against his skin.

His eyes shut immediately as the warm water surrounded him; it felt so amazing, and somehow really intense. Jinki sucked in a deep breath, just staying near the edge because his brain felt like it was exploding from how amazing the water felt against his skin. He shivered slightly with pleasure as he moved his hands in the water.

Jinki went to open his eyes, but at the moment, everything shifted. Jinki didn’t know how to explain it, but in a second, everything had changed. It was confusing and weird, because one moment Jinki was on the side of the water. A second later he found himself, dripping wet, face down in the grass. His heart was pounding like a drum, and he shuddered as he felt Minho hovering above him.

Onyu, I love you, only you, Onyu…

Jinki’s eyes slid shut as he felt Minho’s hands cupping his ass, and his long fingers were touching Jinki everywhere. Jinki felt his head spin, and his whole body was floating above the grass, with this great web of pulsating pleasure wrapped tight around his body. He couldn’t scream, but instead he sang, and he found that as Minho spread his legs, and claimed him, that his voice grew louder. He found that his whole body was drawn tight, and he felt as if he was stretched tight over a board.

His whole body shuddered and trembled with the immense pleasure flooding him. Jinki found it was indescribable. At times, it felt as if the sun was shining through his body. Like he could look down at his arm and see golden rays shining out of his skin, in between gaps in his bones. He shivered, feeling Minho’s hands so gentle and soft on his body, and Jinki never wanted it to end.

Jinki gasped out, singing some unknown tune when he felt everything shift again. His eyes went wide, and he found that he was back in the water. But this time, he was in deeper. He was in the centre of the pool. The water slid down his skin like drops of silver; he shivered because each droplet that slid down his skin felt amazing, like drops of pleasure sliding down his skin.

He looked up to see Minho in front of him, his eyes half shut and his hands reaching for Jinki. His eyes slid shut as Minho pulled him in close, his lips curving against Jinki’s. He let out a groan as Minho kissed him, feeling something inside him grow, this indescribable shining flower blooming in his chest. He didn’t know how it was there, but he could feel it deep inside him.

He could feel the flower changing colours and pulsating with this electric energy as Minho’s tongue pressed into his mouth, and the water around their bodies seemed charged with electricity. It made his whole body feel sensitive and aroused. It was such a strange sensation, and Jinki felt like he was drowning in pleasure; he could feel it flooding every part of his body.

He shuddered, wrapping his arms around Minho. He pressed himself as close as he could to Minho, feeling his flower of pleasure bloom into a gigantic flower, multi-coloured and pulsing softly. He shivered as Minho’s hands reached down to his thighs, and slowly, with warm fingers, he pushed his legs apart. Jinki felt like he ached for Minho, and he opened his mouth to cry out his name.

Onyu, its okay, say you love me too? Say you love me… say you love me like I love you? Only you, Onyu, only you I love.

Jinki shivered, his fingers digging into Minho’s arms and he opened his mouth to speak, but in his mind he spoke, I love you Minho… It felt strange to say it, but as soon as he thought it, Jinki had this sense that he really did love Minho. It felt weird to love someone, but at the same time it felt so natural. He shivered and slowly pressed his hands to Minho’s stomach, and he pressed his fingers to trail of hair that pointed downwards.

But then everything shifted again, and Jinki blinked, finding that the water was gone. He was now sitting in the grass, and he could feel Minho behind him. Jinki looked down and blushed, finding that he was naked, and Minho’s legs were on either side of him. Minho’s fingers slid across his back so delicately that Jinki kept moving back to get closer.

“Minho.” He whispered, and his eyes widened as he had an idea. “Minho, Minho, sweet beautiful Minho…” Jinki whispered, and he could hear Minho laughing behind him, his hands reaching forward to hug Jinki tightly. It was so surreal but so natural and Jinki felt so warm and content. He reached out and started to grab some flowers, and he broke them off. He twisted the stalks together to make Minho a golden glittery crown of flowers, and he smiled happily as he did so.

But Minho tensed behind him, and he hugged Jinki tighter, pressing his head against Jinki’s shoulder. Jinki’s heart felt like it was breaking with happiness as heard Minho speak out loud for the first time.

“No, no, Onyu! No… Onyu!” He sounded upset and Jinki didn’t understand why, but he melted at how his voice sounded spoken. “Onyu, I love you. Always, always! No matter what happens, just remember that I love you, Onyu, only you. In the future, in the past, and the present, I love you Onyu.” Jinki froze, and he nodded his head slowly feeling confused.

He turned back to smile sweetly to Minho and as he did. He froze and clung to Minho as he watched the taller boy slowly becoming transparent. Jinki felt his heart break again and he clung to Minho, you broke it Onyu, the flowers… you broke it. But remember I love you, I always will, please remember that? Hold it deep in your heart. Please Onyu, don’t forget me? Please don’t forget me...

Jinki swallowed and nodded his head, but it was too late; Minho was gone. All that was left of him was a whisper of his name, caressing his skin softly. Jinki wanted to cry, and with his chest aching, he felt everything shifting again, and when he looked up, he was lying on his back in front of the arch again. His chest throbbed with pain, and slowly, he got up.

The grass swayed violently around him, as if it was attacking him. He found that the blades of grass pushed and shoved him away from the arch and the mountain. Soon, he felt backed into a corner, and he huddled in on himself as the grass attacked him. It was like being buffeted by strong winds or violent waves and he was powerless against it. He swallowed and realised with a start that he was sinking, sinking into a black pit. Despair choked his throat as he screamed, and as the blackness swallowed him up whole…

*

“Jinki?”

Jinki moaned, his eyes opening in the strange pale light, it seemed so unnatural and washed out. Everything seemed so pale and dull. It was as if someone had diluted all the colours, and it made him feel queasy. He couldn’t understand all the whites and greys, and how bland everything was. He stared up at the strange person bending over him, her eyes were wide and brown; she looked happy to see him.

“Jinki! Jinki!” She kept repeating loudly, and he stared at her. She looked vaguely familiar, but he had no idea who she was. He blinked, feeling groggy and confused; he started to feel angry because this weird woman kept calling him Jinki. Jinki? I don’t even know who Jinki is? Why are you saying it over and over again? My name is O... Jinki froze; he couldn’t remember his name, and the more he tried to remember it, the more it slipped away.

He shuddered as the woman touched his wrist; it felt so wrong. He could remember another hand gripping his wrist, another touch on his skin that made his heart sing. Her touch felt weird; it just made his head ache. Nothing made sense to him at all. This washed out world felt all wrong to him. He struggled to work out where he was and who he was. His heart was thumping painfully in his chest, and he felt so peculiar and strange.

“Oh Jinki, Jinki thank god you woke up!” The woman cried, and Jinki wanted to scream and ask who she thought he was. He was sure Jinki wasn’t his name, and he felt so confused. He could see images flickering in his brain, but only for a few seconds, and they made his head ache. One flash, and he saw a field of brightly coloured flowers and something tall flickering out of focus. Just as his eyes began to focus, there was another flash and he saw himself, dancing, his surroundings fuzzy and confused. Nothing made any sense, and nothing looked the way he thought it should. He couldn’t remember anything; not his name or anything about himself. But he had this strong sense that he had forgotten something more important, and it just frustrated him.

“I’m so glad you finally woke up. I was so worried you would never wake up, Jinki!” The woman kept talking and smiling down at him, and the longer he listened to her and laid there, he remembered more. He realised after a while that she was his mother, and he laid there blinking as she talked to him. His brain hurt, and he couldn’t remember anything else except that she was his mother. Apparently, he had been in an accident, and had been in a coma for a week. She told him that he was training to be a dancer and singer, and this made him feel strange. His training had been on hold, and his mother had lied to the agency, too scared to tell them he was in a coma.

As his mother spoke, Jinki felt like she was making it all up. He couldn’t remember any of it, and it felt wrong and strange. He was sure that there was something else, something important she was hiding from him. It was making his head spin and he felt sick; he felt so bad that he wanted to shout at her. He wanted to shake his mother until the truth rattled out from her. He was convinced she was lying to him; she was hiding something from him. He swallowed; something had changed him, something important had happened, and she wasn’t telling him about it.
He glared up at her, his anger and frustration welling up inside him like a festering wound. But the more he glared up at her, the more he laid there with hatred and anger in his heart, he realised that her eyes were open and filled with love. The more he glanced into her eyes, he found his anger dissolving, and he could see in her clear beautiful eyes that she loved him, and her words were the truth. She wasn’t trying to brainwash him. She was sobbing, because she was so relieved to see him awake. She was sobbing because he couldn’t remember and she was trying to remind him. It broke his heart when he realised she was telling the truth because he knew he had forgotten the most important thing.

He wanted to cry, and he found his mother’s hand stroking his head comfortingly. He wanted to curl up into the sheets and just cry, and never move because he had forgotten. He had forgotten something so important to him. His heart throbbed with pain and for a while he just lay there in agony. His heart hurt so much that he tuned his mother out, not on purpose, but because of how bad he felt.

When his mother began to stroke his hair back, and when she clutched at his wrist, he began to listen to her again. Trying to focus on her voice and not on the pain and confusion surrounding him completely, he stared up, listening intently as she began to speak again, more urgently this time.

“Jinki, you have to go, for a meeting in a few days, a letter just arrived today. Just as well you woke up, thank god, thank god you woke up!” His mother’s fingers were so warm against his skin. Jinki smiled, his mother sounded so happy that he was awake. “I was so worried.” He snuggled into the covers as he felt her stroking his head lightly.

*

Weeks later, as Jinki turned up at the main SM Office, he still felt a bit dazed and confused. He could remember everything from before the accident. But he had this strong sense that he had forgotten something important, and so he felt peculiar and incomplete, like he was missing a part of himself as he stepped into the office. He didn’t notice the four other guys seated further back in the room. Instead, Jinki focused on the manager, knowing that the manager held his future in his hands.

He took the last seat in the row, smiling shyly as the skinny boy with a weird hairstyle turned and smiled at him brightly. He looked so young, and Jinki forced himself to smile back at him. He shifted nervously as he turned back to the front, and he tried to concentrate on what the man was saying. His head spun slightly, and he figured it was all nerves and anxiety because this was something so important for his future.

His ears were ringing as the man spoke, and Jinki found he could barely concentrate or take it in. He felt so dizzy and light headed as the manager turned to face Jinki and spoke to him, “Jinki, you’re going to be the leader of our new group. We’ve decided to give you the stage name Onyu, but we’ll spell it O N E W.” The manager spelled it out, but it went over Jinki’s head, his brain had paused on the name itself.

He found himself repeating “Onyu” over and over in his head. He sat there, feeling almost sick to his stomach as he remembered the name. He knew it, and he knew it was very important to him but he couldn’t remember why. Or anything about where it came from, or how he knew it. Jinki was still sitting there when everyone else left, and he slowly stumbled up.

Jinki felt sick, his head spinning as he tripped on a shoelace or perhaps air, and as he stumbled up. He felt a hand grabbing his wrist, helping him up. Jinki’s chest tightened as he looked up and saw a tall boy in front of him; his eyes were like pools of chocolate. Something shifted in Jinki’s chest and in his memory, but his mind remained blank.

“Are you okay?” The boy asked gently, his fingers light on Jinki’s wrist and then he mumbled, “I know you from somewhere?” The boy sounded confused, but his voice sounded familiar to Jinki, which he didn’t understand. He was sure he had never met or seen this tall gorgeous boy before. The boy frowned and cocked his head to one side studying Jinki intently. Jinki’s heart was a drum, beating faster and faster. He felt so confused.

“Oh.” The boy looked shy for a moment and then he whispered so softly that Jinki almost missed his words, “I remember, I dreamt about you, you were in a strange dream I had?” He smiled, and his cheeks turned a soft pink and he added, “Oh, sorry I forgot to introduce myself. My name is Minho. I guess I’m your band mate?”

Jinki’s eyes widened and he heard a voice in his head, I love you, I always will please remember that? Hold it deep in your heart. Please Onyu, don’t forget me? Jinki shivered and he gazed up into Minho’s eyes, feeling like he could get lost in them and he suddenly remembered everything. He found it hard to breathe as he felt Minho reach for his hand, squeezing it gently, and he smiled so sweetly down at Jinki.

Jinki felt a sense of relief as he remembered, and he felt like he was home as he looked up into Minho’s eyes. He felt so much better now that he remembered everything, and he couldn’t stop smiling as Minho leaned in and hugged him. It was so sudden and strange, but it made sense, and it fit perfectly. His eyes slid shut and he wrapped his arms around Minho, knowing that he had found his place and his home.

***

Fjdkfkldf I didn’t know how to end this T___________________________T;;

dkjaskdjaskldjasldkjlsjs *corner*

comments? T_______________T


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From: eijifujiryoma
2010-03-24 09:10 am (UTC)

*drags out of corner*

First of all, PG-16 exists? LOL. XD

O-O This gives me goosebumps. I'm not even going to lie, it's SUPER weird. MEME-ing!!!! <333333333333333333333

Hark, it's SOOOOOOOOOOOOO cool. I guess I can understand why you were worried, but it's AMAZING. It's so...smooth, you know? There's an ethereal feeling to it, detached in a way. The way Jinki felt, I'd guess, when he found himself in a different world/ dream. All the emotions popped out at me. You described the world so exquisitely. <333

Honestly, throughout the whole thing, I kept being under the impression that Jinki was in a trance or something. It certainly seemed like it. Or, whatever world he was in blocked all unnecessary thoughts and only what he was feeling was brought out and really FELT. It obviously shows Jinki and Minho are meant to be; meeting in a dream world and then in real life. <333

And the sex scene...whatever it should be called, was...wow. *___* So pretty yet oddly hot at the same time. I lol-ed though, when it suddenly transferred from 'sex' to making a crown of flowers. My heart hurt when their world was suddenly destroyed though. </3 Wonder what would've happened if Jinki hadn't broken it. T.T But the ending was lovely though. At least, I adored it. :D I was going to ask you why you were suddenly using the Korean vr of Jinki's stage name. :P Great parallel and connections though! Yeah, the title is sort of weird. It's because you were rushed right? Sorry. T-T Maybe you could rename it? Like...'Our Dream World' or 'Don't Forget Me' or...'Reverie'? /Yeah, yeah, lame I know. =.= All in all, this was awesome. Thank you so much. ^^ ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥
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From: ex_argh
2010-03-25 01:30 am (UTC)

Re: *drags out of corner*

I dont know? 8D maybe I made it up? I never know how to rate fics :/ so I usually stick a rating thats higher than what I think it is? XD

I TOLD YOU IT WAS SUPER WEIRD -______________________-;;;; I TOLD YOU LOL. Now you know why I was freaking out about it :/
thank you^^; yay~ 8D so it wasnt too awkward to read it? and it was descriptive enough? @@;

hmmm a trance x_x; is that a good thing or bad? D: I guess he somehow went into Minho's dream 8D (which was why Minho could change what he was wearing XD) and thats why.. Jinki wasn't in control? XD

oh was it weird... when it changed from _sex_ to the flower crown thing LOL? XD was that part weird? Do I need to work on that more? Jinki (I totally wrote Kinki XDDD) would've stayed in his coma? maybe? and Minho would've left when he woke up?

ughdfhdsjkfs was the part when Jinki woke up? It feels really awkward to me D: dfjdsklf and unbalanced (something?) compared to the rest? Yeah in the first place I was going to call him Jinki but then I was like "NO WAIT~ I SHOULD USE ONEW AND SPELL IT ONYU" XD

yes the title sucks D: LOL I love "reverie" *edits entry*

I'm glad you liked it~ <3 I'm going to email the other one to you now ;_; *too lazy to fix up the smut* well if i read it again I'll chicken out of sending it to you D: so I'm just going to send it?
I hope the sex is better than that other one? it's longer at least XD
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From: eijifujiryoma
2010-03-25 01:56 am (UTC)

Re: *drags out of corner*

LOL, but I think it matches. Since the sex isn't graphic and all. I always associate NC-17/ R with actual, straight out sexbut half the time it's only BJs or HJs or something like that. So, this rating would fit in perfectly. <33

Wow, you really are worrying over this fic. Will make you stop somehow.

First: YES IT'S SUPER WEIRD BUT IN A SUPER AWESOME WAY!!!!!!!!!!!! <33333333 It wasn't awkward to read and the descriptions are all so beautiful. <333

It's a good thing, lol. XDD That was what gave me gooosebumps but I liked it a lot. Then again, I suppose Jinki's lack of control in a situation comes with the territory of thinking he's a total bottom. ^^;; LOL, I SO thought Minho was going to just ace his clothes altogether and leave him naked but alas it was not meant to be. :P Jinki should go into Minho's dream more often, but this time why not into a normal one where they can have hot, dripping wet- *is shutting up now*

No, I thought it was funny. And cute, though unexpected. Since the scenery kept changing and when they ended up with that POSITION, I definitely thought they were going to "continue" but I was wrong. XP Naw, don't change it, it's perfect the way it is! <3333 I liked it anyway. ^^

Eh, if I HAD to choose a part that was less perfect than the others, I would've chosen that waking up scene. Nothing against it, I was just a bit... how do I say it? I was like this '.____.' because Jinki was mad at his mom. Because I couldn't understand why he'd get mad at his mom, instead of being confused or plunging her with questions or reassuring her that he's fine since she was so worried. Sorry, that part IS okay, but I got a little miffed, I guess. Sorry -__-;;

THE NAME THING IS GENIUS SO I SWEAR.

Eek, you actually changed it. ^^;;

8D MORE AND LONGER SMUT!!! WILL WAIT TO RECEIVE! <33333333333333333333333

Eh, just wondering, was this plot inspired by something by any chance? Or at least the dream world and Minho? Did you get the idea by reading something else?
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From: eijifujiryoma
2010-03-25 01:59 am (UTC)

Re: *drags out of corner*

Sorry, I meant "Eek, you actually going to change it. ^^;;"

Oh, fail. >>
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From: ex_argh
2010-03-25 02:11 am (UTC)

Re: *drags out of corner*

yeah true~ what did I rate it as? XD well R is not so graphic sex as well right? :S dsdisfsd

I worry over all my fics :/ but this one because its so different.

okay thank you <3333 :D

HAHAHAHA no :P since Jinki was freaking out about lack of clothes Minho was evil and gave him a sack to wear 8D sexy huh? XD

yeah the waking up scene :/ was my least favourite part. IT WAS SO HARD TO WRITE. thats because Jinki didn't remember who she was at first T_T and he was annoyed/angry because he was confused and didn't know what was going on. Ah okay so that part needs work? Somehow Jinki couldn't remember when he first woke up~ like he had been so involved in that place with Minho that the real world didn't make sense to him at first.

HAHA NO I didnt change it *bricked* I went to~ but I clsoed the browser so I didnt but I will now.

well apparently shes going to finish beta-ing it today? but we will see -_-;;
yeah first is the 8D first smut scene *_* and then you have the 2nd~ and then............ some other stuff and then the sex ~ :D

well in the first place I was remembering this story at read at school. which was not related at all. But then it also made me think of another story I read where this guy was transported into this place with elves? fairies? and I loved how she wrote it... and at first I was going to make more people there~ (other than them) but it felt too complicated?
and it was inspired by... "The Lovely Bones" have you seen that movie? I got the idea of the grass from that~ because the other world in that was just so... amazing/breathtaking. but the other stuff I just... kinda decided myself after thinking @@;

like the sky and stuff 8D I wanted to make it really different than ours~ and somehow it became like that @@;;;;;

I'm going to go and change the scene where he wakes up.
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[User Picture]From: xxqod
2010-04-07 06:41 am (UTC)
SPOT. will be back later~

lol at the string of comments XD
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From: ex_argh
2010-04-07 06:49 am (UTC)
XD yes I'm a hopeless comment spammer :/

haha I thought about saving you a spot but ran out of time D:
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[User Picture]From: xxqod
2010-04-08 07:49 pm (UTC)
ZOMG.
Sex in shifting places XD ZOMG. I don't even know how to properly call it T.T
But that. really. would be so kinky and just arousing in itself that. <3
Gawds. I think that is the best non-explicit sex scene I've read~!! *admires*

Just that whole dream like, thing and ZOMG <3
This is just.
Gawds.
I fail to use words to express how captivating this fic is and just. *flails arms around*
Really.
AWESOME. <3

Neomu johayo! (I think my romaji fails me)

Sorry for the late comment '^^
<3 ~~
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From: ex_argh
2010-04-10 03:38 am (UTC)
ah sorry for taking so long to reply T_T;
8D yeah sex in shifting places @_____@;;; ah thank you :O jfhsdjkfh I was hoping it would come across nicely and not just.. weird :/ ♥

thank you~ ah~ neomu johayo = really like this? is that right? XDDDD something along those lines?

and don't be sorry~ ♥ I know you're busy :D
thank you for the lovely comment~ ♥ :D
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[User Picture]From: xxqod
2010-04-10 06:57 am (UTC)
really like it, that's right ^^
hehe.
yay!
*runs*
<3 ~~
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[User Picture]From: weerainbow
2010-04-07 11:38 am (UTC)
WOW! I loved this. The whole thing was so beautifully written. You have an amazing imagination, honestly, to describe so fully and completely this awesome dreamworld and all the things that happened there! I actually felt a little as though I was there experiencing it all with Jinki.
And the way you brought him back to reality and how he met Minho again was brilliant. They both had met in the same dream and now they were together for real YAY!!!
I can't even put in words how much I enjoyed this. You and your Tofuho are JJANG!!! ♥
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From: ex_argh
2010-04-08 02:19 am (UTC)
^^ thank you~ ahhh I was a little worried about posting this :/ because its kinda weird/strange? XDDDD but uh your comment ♥ is so lovely XD! Haha I do have a good imagination :/ and I read a lot of fantasy which probably helps lol~ ^^;;
thank you~ you leave the best comments :D (and what does jjang even mean ;_; *fails* ♥ thank you~
:D
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[User Picture]From: weerainbow
2010-04-08 09:29 am (UTC)
Jjang is a Korean word that's used to say something's...THE BEST!! ^^
♥♥
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From: ex_argh
2010-04-08 09:31 am (UTC)
oh ^^; so thats what it means! I kept seeing it and wondering T____________T;;

thank you for telling me? ♥ ^^;;;;
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[User Picture]From: weerainbow
2010-04-08 09:37 am (UTC)
Glad to be of help sweetie ;o) I'm not great with my Korean but if my few words I know can help someone else understand I'm excited!!! hehe.
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[User Picture]From: volatileflame
2010-04-07 02:35 pm (UTC)
it was beautiful ♥
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From: ex_argh
2010-04-08 02:29 am (UTC)
thank you :D ♥
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[User Picture]From: polaroidkey
2010-04-08 06:17 am (UTC)
OKAY GLAD TO SEE IM NOT DEMENTED FOR BEING THE ONLY ONE SEEING THIS AS BEAUTIFUL. ♥

I TOLD YOU IT WAS. :D

I attempted my hand at something like this, never wrote it out, just had it in my head, but it still sounded depressing. XD

My friend said my writing style was angsty. lmao. Ithink she's right. half my fics, I've had the majority commenting stuff like "you made me cry."

HAHAH. and LOL at that string of comments! XDD comment spammers ftw. :3
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From: ex_argh
2010-04-08 09:33 am (UTC)
LOLLLLLL thanks for the comment T_________T ♥ haha I didnt expect you to comment because ♥ you've told me in emails :D

you should write it out? :O OMG angst is awesome though XDDD (lol as long as their is a happy ending? XD)

*nods* comment spammers for the win (eijifujiryoma and I are at it again LOL)

*emails you* ^^;
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[User Picture]From: pixziestikxz
2010-04-10 12:49 am (UTC)
hahaha I just love this too much~ ♥

lololol. I forget now. xDD But most of my angst turn out sad anyways. I break too many pairings. lol.

teehee. *checks my email*
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From: ex_argh
2010-04-10 03:43 am (UTC)
;_; thank you~ *weeps* thank you for loving it lol? ♥

aww okay~ well you should try something like this? even if it is angsty~ it can still be beautiful but heartbreaking? I think that works really well ;_;

♥ (yeah I forgot to reply to your email *bad person* D:)
XDDDDDD
oh and since you like JongKey so much~ I'll try to add more into the fics with JongKey do you mind if its Key topping Jjong in one of them? wait, both of them? D: LOLLLLLL
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[User Picture]From: wykedpanda
2010-04-08 11:26 pm (UTC)
ahhhh....gawd, I want to exist in a fantasy world like that. It makes reality seem so bland and uncolourful...dislike. :P I WANT A PURPLE SUN....*makes list for next year's birthday list*

I like how you incorporated "only you" into "onyu" which then turns into Onew...and Minho..."I know you from a dream, right?" COME ON, KID!!!! REMEMBER!!! rofls... I was half expecting Minho to like sweep Onew off his feet...and who knew flowers would be so dangerous??? T___T

Loved this..definitely like the AU/fantasy feel... :)

Thank you for sharing~~
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From: ex_argh
2010-04-09 08:19 am (UTC)
8D when is your birthday? @@ just so you know~ I have time to make you a world with a purple sun *waves magic wand* XDDDDDDD

awww sorry~ well Minho can sweep Jinki off his feet later 8DDDD

thank you for the lovely comment ♥ :DDD
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[User Picture]From: wykedpanda
2010-04-09 09:23 pm (UTC)
Awww, it already passed T______T CAN YOU MAKE ME A WORLD WITH A PURPLE SUN ANYWAYS?!?!?!?!?! *laughs gleefully*

Haha, I do believe Minho will always manage to sweep people off their feet so it's all good :D
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From: ex_argh
2010-04-10 03:40 am (UTC)
awwwww 8D well I can try~ 8D I'd love a purple sun too~ ♥
and um I realised my sentence came out weirdly? Right? *fails* D:

yeah he is the flaming charisma right? :O So ... yeah~ XD
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